|Reviews for The Mountain|
| Sean chapter 1 . 1/17/2013
I think the premise of the sort "poem-y" is good, but you lack a certain syllabic pattern. Some lines are arranged in ways that don't mesh well with others. Words in writing jump and flow, but poetry gurgles and singes, yelps and softly mutters.
It helps to just read things aloud to smooth it out.