Nummms! I wonder how long before the romance kicks in... Or of the physical variety. Or when he will find out that she is his friend's step daughter. Love their run ins. :)

Haha, I love how Olivia got what she wanted - but not exactly in the way she wanted it. She shouldn't feel guilty or undeserving of the glory though. I understand why, but hey, at least she got the criminal. Plus, she should give herself some credit for getting the information in the first place.

I love love how Raleigh and Olivia just sat at the table in silence together. It may sound weird, but I love scenes like that. Just quiet, peaceful coexistence. And, of course, Olivia having Raleigh drop her off a distance from her house totally shows her character. I think characters like Olivia can easily become cliche', but you're making her your own and I really, really like that.

[I decided to test his driving abilities, giving him directions last minute.] - my favorite line of the chapter. I grinned so hard.

Raleigh's sister's instincts may not be so wrong after all. Though Raleigh claims that it's not in the way his sister thinks it, the line: "Her words, however, lingered long after she'd gone." seems to suggest otherwise. He's very clearly thinking about it.

Thank you for taking time to write. Your update made my day that bit better!

Wonderful as usual! I like Helen and the interaction between Livi and Raleigh and the mention of Ryan. Ok, so I like everything :) Please up date again soon! Oh, and is it coincidence that you, Star123 and Carmel March have a tendency of updating at about the same time? Although I am still waiting for the next chapter of Vertigo...

:) absolutely love this story! aww he drives her part-way homee LOOOL and raleigh is fooling himself, he totally met a girl...THAT HE WILL PROPOSE TO AND LIVE WITH FOREVER AND EVER AND-okay, thats enough of that. LOL :P hope you'll update soonnn! (:

Great chapter! Finally, someone plants a seed in Raleigh's head! Hahaha. Anyway. Great chapter as always and I hope to see more of it soon. Can't wait for the next chapter!

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Clawstrike590

Awesome chapter!

Oh dear god you don't even know how much I needed this update. Long story short my day was not very good and it just got worse, and I felt just utterly awful. And after reading this I feel much better. It was a fantastic distraction and it cheered me up immensely so thank you so much for that. I don't feel nearly half as bad as I did before.

Loved the chapter. Olivia is just such a kick-a** character, and I love her to death. She's awesome and I love her conversations with Raleigh. He's hilarious as well and even though I want them to get together and everything I still really want her to catch him at the jewelry heist. Ugh, I mean yeah that horrible Harrington guy is more important but when she's SO close to catching him I can't help but feel anxious as well. Oh! And the cupcake lady. She's sweet and I hope we get to see more of her :P

Can't wait for more Hunt and Braxton interactions :) I'm loving this story so far! Annnd I hope you're well.

Awwh haha! The coffee shop scene was great. And I honestly love Olivia's character so much, she's quickly becoming my fave out of all your stories! She's just very relatable, to me at least. I can't really tell where the story's going, but I suppose that's a good thing! Update soon, keep being fabulous!

I hope you update before I leave on for spring break next week! :)
love your story!

Awesome story!

It's funny how Raleigh doesn't know Olivia is Jim's step daughter, but thinks she's a customer. Guess Jim didn't mention it? Really wonder how Tyson's side job's going to go and if they end up getting caught.

Oh I love that Ryan would notice Olivia's moods more than the others. It's awesome still getting to have him around and being his generally brilliant self!

And aww that Raleigh didn't want to look bad in front of Jim! I think that's my favourite scene with the two of them so far. The way they were able to talk shop, in a way, and especially how Raleigh was concerned for her was awesome! I also really liked how he was all 'he's like a father to me' and she's like 'excuse me? Like a father to YOU?!'

One little typo that tripped me up:
glanced up a suspect's glanced up from a suspect's

Broken legs and charity theft (sort of)? Oh Raleigh...

Cheers!

I'm seriously so into Raleigh. I like his thoughts and the way he views things. The tour around the gallery in his head was a really great insight into him.

And poor Olivia! I so didn't want Raleigh to have seen her duck. She's a cool FBI agent, so much cooler than he thinks! And her step-dad pulling away after he got a son, that was really sad, but she was so matter-of-fact about it. Kind of heart-breaking.

Maybe it's a weird thing to think whilst reading a romance story, but I'm glad Raleigh forgot about her as he got to work. I like that he's single-minded (and it's going to be so much better when Olivia becomes the one thing on his mind!).

With my quasi-editor hat on, I noticed a few typos:
Eery eerie
beer-weiling beer-wielding?
ensuring me assuring me
his hop his shop
loved the be loved to be

If I ever point out something that's an American vs Australian thing I sincerely apologise, I know from experience that it's pretty frustrating when that happens!

Cheers!

Hmm, I'm surprised Olivia didn't throw it back in his face that she was Jim's daughter. Or that Jim didn't introduce her as his daughter and not just "his girl".

Oh, a few mistakes:

"Moments" instead of "moment"
He hadn't opened his sandwich and the yogurt I passed his way remained untouched for a few moment.

"Sometimes" instead of "moment"
Sometime we burdened ourselves with certain cases more so than others.

Add "at" after "held"
It was being held a hotel.

Ah, very interesting. I'm excited to see what happens next. Keep up the good work!