|Reviews for Bells of Forgiveness|
| ohsocyanide chapter 1 . 1/27/2013
[Alec nodded tightly and pressed his lips together tightly.] The repetition here is a bit weird.
["Ryder," cherry said sharply.] Capitalize 'Cherry.'
I think you've done a good job of conveying a sense of bitterness through the whole passage. I get the feeling that he's tired and he misses Jason, and a lot of the tone comes from that.
In a way, I wish we would have seen more clues to him being an Angel rather than a Fallen. I mean, being cut was a clue, but even before that would've been nice as well. It is a single chapter piece, though, and only so much can be done in that.
It would be interesting to see you go back and write about Jason and Alec before he "falls," or even after. Just my opinion, obviously.
Glad to finally see this officially posted! :)
| Sempai Has Noticed You Today chapter 1 . 1/16/2013
Really good story! Love it. I was kinda expecting a different ending, but this ending is a nice surprise! Keep writing!