Reviews for The Silent City
Not Michael Rosen chapter 4 . 2/25/2013
I'm gonna call that Bailey mistakes Ellie for the Weeper somehow, since she took the pre-Outbreak clothes from the skeleton. Now something weird has to happen to her hair so it turns blond, if it isn't blond already :P but never-mind my plot guessing, this is my favorite chapter thus far. The introduction of new characters was a refreshing change of pace coming off of three chapters in the city, and I'm intrigued by the dynamics between them all. I found it a tad odd that Andrea didn't give any explanation to Terre for her disappearance, but it's not that big a gripe. "That won't help," Andrea told her. "C'mon. Scream" was some good humor, and the part about looking old from being an ass :D great stuff. Oh, and I totally foresee Andrea and Viktor getting back together :3
Not Michael Rosen chapter 3 . 2/25/2013
While this one wasn't as fast paced as the last I still enjoyed the amount of detail that went into Ellie's time stuck in the room. It was a realistic description and I liked going through all the steps Ellie had to think about to avoid being eaten, keep herself alive, and escape. I was gonna criticize why Ellie didn't wait just a little bit longer until the Biters were out of earshot but I suppose I'd want to get out of that room as quick as possible too if I were in her situation :P I didn't get why there would be a random barbed-wire fence at the top of a staircase though; maybe the "distinctly masculine" guy set it up there? Or maybe I'm just not familiar enough with architecture :P Either way excellent progression in this chapter.
PrefersFiction chapter 4 . 2/22/2013
I really like your story so far, it's very interesting. Your story flows really well and gets people hooked from the first chapter by releasing little tidbits of information about the main character and the others later on. Well done!
Nega-Rosen chapter 2 . 2/2/2013
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Nega-Rosen chapter 1 . 2/2/2013
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Not Michael Rosen chapter 2 . 2/2/2013
This was definitely just as entertaining as the last chapter! It didn't seem rushed at all to me; the action was nicely paced and I love the description you use for the more gruesome scenes. Especially Ellie's encounter with the Biter after waking up. "The knife pulled free with a wet sucking sound" made me cringe hah. Your balanced depth of description creates a great atmosphere, I was absorbed! :)

I don't have any major criticisms, although if I'm being picky this chapter closes out in an almost identical manner to the last one with Ellie prepping for a lonely night. Not a major deal though and obviously going to happen with the nature of the story :P

One thing though, I don't understand how you can be grossed out by this - watch?vv2XkTIYhQC8

And write stuff like this - "Pulling the rod free, she stabbed it several times into the Biter's belly, making sure to tear him open ... Squeezing her eyes shut, she bent down and dug her right hand into his gut. The lukewarm insides made a squelching sound as she pulled them free and flung them down the both sides of the hall and at the walls." XD
Not Michael Rosen chapter 1 . 1/19/2013
The beginning definitely set a creepy mood as I kept reading and I enjoyed the description of the Biters. This had a really smooth progression to it and the action scene with the jumping Biters was convincingly frightening. I feel there are specific reasons for making the intelligent murderous zombie blond but, I won't elaborate on that. There was just the right amount of description for each aspect of the story; not so much as to be boring but enough for myself to become immersed. My only qualm is with why Ellie didn't move Rob from the driver's seat and take the car for herself. Other than that it's a great intro to a suspenseful zombie story! Looking forward to more :D
Midnight Sage chapter 1 . 1/16/2013
Awesomely smooth writing; I envy your ability. This looks to be a great story, will follow :P