Reviews for Darkness
jesusfreakauthorgirl17 chapter 1 . 3/13/2013
You're excellent at rhyming! That's something I've never been good at. I'm not totally sure what kind of advice you're looking for, but you could fiddle with formatting if you want and make stanzas, but it's not necessary. You're metaphors are also great!
The Loved And Unloved chapter 1 . 3/11/2013
Hi there. I'm starting from the bottom up ._. (Starting with this one)

I like the rhyme, it's a pretty poem n_n

But you didn't capitalize the sentences :(

*Off to the next poem*


- Aka The Loved And Unloved
Jeremiah Cecil chapter 1 . 3/11/2013
I was going to starts singing along, but then I realized that there wasn't a melody.

One thing that I wondered over was shy the person addressed is said to be both "in the dark" and "in that place, so high" (I would assume a heaven of some sort).

The last stanza was better than the rest, I think, but if there are stanzas in this poem (some don't bother, you know), then you might want to go over the formatting again. This website has a formatting system from the Pit itself, but it can be worked around. _