okay that was...ummm...wow. i don't really know how to put this. it touched me definitly, i just don't know how. but it was great!

Okay, that's it. I worship you, Serena-sama *worship, worship* you are soooo lucky, you can write like that! *worship, worship*

;_; That's really really good! It flows so nicely! And I love your choice of words. I think it conveys emotion very well! I love the theme and mood.

Aww, you have such a gift for poetry. I hope that with practice, I will be able to write something as good as this.

Wow, what else can I say in the presence of art!, that was beautiful!

I liked the theme, and the ideas behind it were great, but maybe a little less focus on rhyme and more on meter. Your feet don't match up. (if that doesn't make sense, email me. I love to talk, and give advice.)