Reviews for Post-18
Purple Octopus Badger chapter 1 . 1/22/2013
You have done it again, your poems are always some sort of descriptive trip of adolescences from the perspective of a very aroused and imaginative teenage neighbor eaves dropping room next door as they have sex. Really glad to see your new work!
Bennie Boo chapter 1 . 1/21/2013
Hello me love!

Well well well sweetie, what do we have here?! Another fantastic poem!

I must say this poem is wonderful! I love how it's not only the physical description of a reality, I'm imagining when placing this into context (AO4 :p), but also you parallel the actions of work to that of becoming a man and thus "Someone's Daddy".

The middle stanza works particularly well. The verbs "Lifting, pushing, aching" really emphasis the physical actions of manual labor when spoken aloud. Additionally, one could also interpret this to be describing sexual intercourse and naughtiness, the process of becoming "Someone's daddy".

The rustic element of bleeding into each others mouth is very effective as it introduces an element of biological union - as well as perhaps a slightly darker side, which I'm not sure to make of in this poem but it's simply my interpretation!

But yes, a wonderful piece. You should definitely send it to Under the Radar magazine or some other publication.

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Sarah-Brighteyes chapter 1 . 1/20/2013
I like this piece. I love the language and flow! great!