AWESOME so far... :) great job :)

EAM

Love it

I've been talking with you for so long and I hadn't read any of your pieces, and now that I have, I must say, you are an amazing writer! So far my favorite character is Shay. She's so carefree and fun. Though Chelsea is so relatable. My father is in the military and you explained it perfectly with saying that it's cool, but hard. And yes, lunch is the best subject. Anyway, I am steadily looking forward to seeing more of the story.

I love how he kissed her hand :P That was a nice touch, it added to the playful feel. This is well written, I haven't picked up on any mistakes, but then again I am reading it for entertainment value, not as an editor! Nice work :) Can't wait for the next chapter!

I love the beginning snippet you've provided us with, it hooks me into wanting to read! I do like the extra level of the popular kids beneath the cover, makes them seem more real. Great first chapter :) She is quite the typical Mary Sue so far, so I do hope that her personality will develop, judging from the beginning snippet, I assume it will :)

This is going really well! And I agree with the first reviewer, romance and love shouldn't be rushed—waiting makes it all the more exciting and touching.

Keep it up!

Falfa

Interested to see how Chelsea deals at the party, and pretty anxious for the moment that she'll meet Don x3.

Can't wait to see more

Falfa

Great start...

This is really, really good. I'm looking forward to see where you are going to go with it. Just a piece if advice- don't jump into the love part too soon. It doesn't seem like you will, but the agony of waiting sometimes really helps the story. Great job!