Reviews for Love
jesusfreakauthorgirl17 chapter 1 . 3/13/2013
Again, rhyming is great! I think the rhythm could be improved though. Spliting it into stanzas may help because the reader will know that it may or may not be the same pattern. What I like doing is having a pattern that I break only when there's a point I really want to be know. For example, in this poem, having the line, "Will springe ever return?" by itself would be perfect.
The Loved And Unloved chapter 1 . 3/11/2013
I like the rhyming portion n_n

But in the sentence "it just doesn't seem feel right." It didn't make sense. But typos happen. I'd just thought I'd point it out; I'm not trying to be rude. I'm a nice person(:


- Aka The Loved And Unloved
Jeremiah Cecil chapter 1 . 3/11/2013
I think I must be reading this one wrong. I'm reading each line and stanza at about the same speed and rhythm, and so the difference in length is throwing off the feel.

As for content...
1. it's cliche
2. that's not always a bad thing

It's a common theme in love-poetry to compare love to a flower, whether wilting or in bloom, so it's just that much harder to make something original and vibrant while using that analogy. All the same, this one's alright (for being a love-flower poem).
KaylaHeart chapter 1 . 1/21/2013
Gorgeous. I like it!