|Reviews for Nightmare|
| Eloise.m chapter 1 . 5/7/2013
Your use of language and vocabulary was rather simple, but the grammar was at least intact. I find your plot generally interesting and appealing, and the end of the chapter would make me want to read on. I would like to see more character growth as the story progresses. What is Liv thinking now? Does Nightmare have more to him than just pure evil?
Overall rating: 7.5/10 - so far. Keep it up! :)
| Revamp chapter 1 . 5/1/2013
I love this story and I realize it's meant to be a one shot but it does have a lot of potential to be something more. Beautiful dialogue and an interesting sequence of events. Loved this one.
| CountryGal12 chapter 1 . 2/8/2013
I'm short on time so if this is not very detailed I'm sorry.
I liked the characters. They were unique, had cool names (yeah, I look for that) and overall, amazing.
Plot bunny was good, unique, and nail biting.
I was confused with the setting, like I didn't know where I was.
Last thing is that I found 0 grammar and spelling mistakes.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 1 . 1/21/2013
Great job, too. I can see improvement from the last one to this one - much better job on the dialogue tags, opening, and pacing.
Keep watching punctuation - comma splices and inside quotes, specifically.
This is epic, though. You rock. /big hug
| this wild abyss chapter 1 . 1/21/2013
Grammatically, this is a bit better than previous writing I've read from you. I would suggest, though, that you look up proper punctuation/formatting for dialogue, as what you have now is incorrect and definitely distracts from the piece itself. I liked the concept—dream sequences are a bit cliched but I think you handled it more or less okay. I would have liked the plot to be a bit more fleshed out, though, as without a true conflict and resolution this reads more like a vignette than a fully developed short story.