|Reviews for Reaper|
| Rainel Krey chapter 1 . 3/24/2013
Hello hope you've been doing well :)
The overall concept id interesting and I'm looking forward to see how this whole thing develops! I especially enjoyed the beginning, it was descriptive and even though you knew what was going to happen, you're still curious as to how it will happen.
I really like your descriptions! I think it sets things up fairly well. Some editing would do it no harm though, if you re-read the newscast, they probably won't mention the corpse's facial expression, and some minor re-wording of re-arrangement of sentences would really make it stand out more!
Unless you are planning on writing creating fairly typical males, I think your characters are okay. What I mean by that is that's not how I've seen most males act but I also know quite a few oddballs, which are the characters I personally prefer to write about. I think the dialogue is fine though, it gives them a personality :D
Good luck with this! I look forward to seeing more from this!
| muscrat2012 chapter 1 . 2/3/2013
This sounds really good so far, hope you continue it.
| blue60 chapter 1 . 1/23/2013
The conversation seem real enough. But they sound a little to cool for school sorta thing