Reviews for Melanie
MeribethSC chapter 1 . 6/16/2013
I kind of want to know what happen next are you going to keep writing?
Anonymous Mouse chapter 1 . 2/16/2013
For a first story this isn't half bad. I like the details, very...detailed. But i ish it was longer! I want to know what happened afterward.
Autumn-ShinyDragon chapter 1 . 1/27/2013
too bad it is so short, I want to know what happened afterwards. But nice job :)
rhoades chapter 1 . 1/27/2013
Very short but also...very good. Try and expand on this as a longer idea. Would love to read this as part of a larger story.
Ophelia Schmit chapter 1 . 1/27/2013
As far as first stories go, I actually enjoyed it. The theme is so dark, and leaves whoever reads it to be able to interpret parts of it.

Hermie
TheForgottenWarrior chapter 1 . 1/27/2013
For your first story, it isn't half bad. It's fairly descriptive and the idea of it is horrific and fascinating at the same time. Excellent job. Warrior