Reviews for I'm Always Here For You
SpawnMeister666 chapter 14 . 2/14
I think you have the makings of a good story here, but there are some pretty obvious issues. The way it's written, this whole story takes place over the course of little more than a week, and that's just unrealistic. But lets boil it down to the main points;

Abby meets Lucy
That night Abby talks to her boyfriend on the phone, he's too busy to talk to her and she gets upset, then she meets Lucy again.
The next day Abby dumps her boyfriend and says something flirtatious to Lucy
That night the two of them decide to become a couple...

It's all too fast, too rushed. The dialogue you have between the individual characters is good and fairly realistic, but the rest of it is rushed.

In the real world, Abby would agonise over whether she is attracted to Lucy over a fairly long period of time. Just because she has a gay friend and doesn't think there's anything wrong with gay people, that doesn't mean that when she suddenly starts having gay feelings herself she'd just shrug her shoulders and say 'okay'.

As I said, there are the makings of a good story here, but the way it's written is too rushed. It's like you're trying to get a whole novel into a single chapter, and I think if you develop the characters more you can turn this into something quite special.

Spawny
stevenc95 chapter 14 . 10/28/2013
When are you going to write a book your stories are awesome better than the books out now.
stevenc95 chapter 3 . 10/28/2013
I am very confused :O.
stevenc95 chapter 2 . 10/28/2013
I never saw that coming (Lucy having a gf) .
stevenc95 chapter 1 . 10/28/2013
Great first chapter can't wait to read the rest.
Van Quatra chapter 1 . 10/26/2013
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h earthserpent chapter 13 . 10/15/2013
:D bring on the next one.
h earthserpent chapter 12 . 8/23/2013
:D Wooohoo love it. keep going.
tinkerturtle99 chapter 11 . 8/12/2013
Aww write more
h earthserpent chapter 11 . 8/10/2013
:D bring on the next one.
tinkerturtle99 chapter 10 . 8/10/2013
Awww love it!
h earthserpent chapter 10 . 7/14/2013
:D Woo update. love it. :)
h earthserpent chapter 8 . 5/22/2013
:D great chapter. bring on the next one.
tinkerturtle99 chapter 7 . 5/6/2013
Awww! So cute!
h earthserpent chapter 7 . 5/5/2013
:D good chapter. can't wait for the next one.
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