|Reviews for Lifes new order|
| myheart4you chapter 2 . 1/28/2013
Joshua is totally her ex boyfriend. They seem like they have history.
It's "low self-esteem" Not "low self of steam" lol
I knew that chick was pregnant. I totally knew it.
Remember, italicize dreams as well as flashbacks. And if you want to be clear about a text message, bold the message so we know.
Formatting is your friend, trust me :)
I think you have a great story in the making :P
| myheart4you chapter 1 . 1/28/2013
You don't have awful grammar, it was better than expected when you mentioned it, lol.
This was cute, it's too bad she's so shy. And Tom-boyish. But whatever. I liked it a lot and (I hate when people say this about my stories) I really didn't see anything important to fix, other than the grammar and some punctuations.
Oh, and for a flashback, there is no need to put "flashback" and "end of flashback". Just italicize the words, and everyone will know what you are talking about if your character mentions it subtly. Like, "With a small sigh, my mind went back to my best friends wedding day" and then you just do the flashback and then you can just smoothly go back to normal.