Reviews for Monkey Business
HighOnBrokenWings chapter 1 . 2/1/2013
Hey,
So the first paragraph is phrased a little oddly. You use third person as an example, but then you switch back to first in the same sentence. Also, I would suggest changing numerical values to their written versions, it looks more professional, and easier to read. You have a nice sense of humour stringed through this beginning, but it does feel as though you need to fine tune it a little more. Keep working at it :)