Reviews for You Found Me
anonymousvoice chapter 15 . 6/20/2017
I just found this story and I'm pleasantly surprised so far :) I can't wait to see what you have planned.
LDF chapter 1 . 5/23/2017
[I walked out the doors cursing my brother, to see a familiar sight.]

This could really use some more description! What doors? Where is the protagonist coming from? Why are they cursing their brother?

["Noah left me to go to lacrosse practice, give me a ride." I demanded]

This is a comma splice. Split the sentence in two or use a different transition.

If there’s a speech verb, it’s not considered the start of a new sentence, so there should be a comma rather than a period inside the quotes.

I'm not sure 'demanded' is the right speech verb to use here. It makes her sound a bit spoiled. I suppose it's her character as she seems to think she's entitled to it.
bs13 chapter 3 . 2/13/2013
Weeeell. Where to start, um...nice, I'd say. Still very, very rushed...maybe even more than I thought it would be, but...I'm still here, still interested, so...update.
bs13 chapter 2 . 2/1/2013
This story seems a little bit rushed. Just a tad. But I think it's a good enough start. Update.
bs13 chapter 1 . 2/1/2013
Aw. I like this story. Update!