I loved this story so so much and even stayed up until 4.30am to finish reading it (although I was unsure about sleeping to begin with cause nightmares are sooooooo great *note the sarcasm*), but still, it's an awesome story!

sucks

i fucking made a mistake making your stupid ass

Awww! this is literally my favorite book! When Seth didnt show up at the hospital that made me soo upset... You did a fantastic job on the story! I have stayed up til 2:00 reading this! Thank ypu for writing this!

Fghi

Us it over?

I seriously do love this book insanely. I started reading it on Wattpad this morning, and came here to finish reading it. Great job overall.

OMG THAT WAS AMAZING I LOVED IT I LOVED THE CHARACTERS I LOVED TO PLOT TWISTS DID I MENTION IT WAS AMAZING?!

Quick question: if she's 16, how is she a senior?

She never got with Seth?

But this book is really good

To start off, sorry I'm not logged in because I need to reset my password. If you want to PM me is my usual username.

To start with, I was really enjoying your story. The idea is so unlike any I've ever read before, and I was imagining reading about a naive girl with a harebrained scheme who suddenly realises what they've done and are forced to grow up. In many ways it was this, and many of the flaws to the story are there to make it work so I'm not going to complain about them (things like the ease of her getting a job at the maternity shop, and the way she decided to get pregnant, had sex and bam! when in reality it can take months if not years.)

My issue with the story is the end. The majority of the story is well thought out, you have characters like Lena and Cassie's dad who are likable and have obviously had a lot of thought put into them, and it all seems like you really know where you're going with it. Then all of a sudden, she goes into labour and that whole side of the story has what? Three or four chapters devoted to it? It all seemed rushed, and almost like you've got bored and want the story over and done with as soon as possible. I'll try and go into some detail with it here, not to be harsh because I'm not trying to be, but for constructive criticism because I think this is an idea and you are an author with so much promise.

- Seth. What the hell happens with him? He starts of as a lovable (albeit cliche) player, she gets to know him and finds out about his past, his homelife etc. All good. Then suddenly, he goes from convincing her not to give the babies up to leaving her while she's in the middle of labour, doesn't know that she had to have a c-section, doesn't know the gender of his kids, doesn't see them till they're like a week old? Sorry, but that doesn't sit right with me. The whole 'I thought I couldn't have kids' thing isn't a good enough explanation for his behaviour I'm afraid. Such a dramatic character shift needs to be properly developed and explained or it just doesn't work. The same goes for their non-relationship. I loved Cassie's sarcasm about seeing him walk off just before she goes into labour, but their relationship seemed confused, going backwards and forwards without any proper explanation other than he felt "obligated" to kiss her and they both knew it wouldn't work. (?!)

-She's doing a project focused on the social effects of teen pregnancy, so in my opinion we need to see more of these. The story is called "The Pregnancy Project", meaning we need to find out more about the project itself. What grade did she get? How did Mr Everett and the others react?

-Her mum. The scene with her serving her at the shop was good, but it could do with developing. How did Cassie really feel? She's working in a maternity store- so why's her mum shopping there? Potentially, her mother could be pregnant again. I get that by the end she realises that she has her dad and that's enough, but she needs more of a moment of clarity for realising this, rather than just randomly seeing her mum when this isn't even the main focus of the chapter and then being kind of like "But yeah, I don't care about her" by the end. Maybe Cassie sees contemplates finding her mum, but eventually sees her dad with the babies and realises she doesn't care enough. Maybe Cassie talks to her, they don't get along and she leaves it at that.

-Mira. I like her, and I get that she's there almost as a cameo appearance, but at the end you put too much focus on a character that the audience have only met like twice. Cassie names her daughter after her! Not Lena, who has been there for her from the start, but Mira. You need more interaction between the two, because naming the baby after her is a pretty big deal.

-The babies! I'm a sucker for a pregnancy/baby story, so I want to see more of them! More after she's had them and they're back at home- I know this isn't the main focus of the story, it's supposed to be about her pregnancy, but just a couple more chapters would be great.

I hope some of this helps :)

omg i love this book

i think seth is a bad person anyone feeling the same way

This is a pretty cool story but there are a lot of inconsistencies! Both Seth's and the mother's last name changed and hadn't Lena already met Hanna (originally Hannah) at Cassie's house before she asked Cassie about her? Also, where's Mark? And why are they so obsessed with Sprite? :P

I agree that some of the '16 and Pregnant' girls are stupid, but there was this couple on one series (Caitlyn her boyfriend) who had the best relationship I've seen on the show and they put their baby up for adoption. It was so sad to watch :( But seriously, Jenelle kept the baby but every other week she was in court because she did drugs and got in fights all the time, poor Jace was practically raised by his grandma.