I started reading this assuming that it'll mainly revolve around May and Trent. So I was honestly a bit worried that I'll find the POVs of other characters boring in comparison. I eventually found it pretty interesting once I figured out how all these people are tied together.

Btw, I'm starting to find Abeline's romance more interesring than that of May and Trent.

really like your story I read it because I like trent

f*** in finally

The ending! How can you torture me like that? ; 0

Harmony! That is The Hint!

Who is the Rebecca you mentioned in your author's note?

Another thing I would say is don't rush :)

As much as I love a quick update, I know creativity flows fast but attention to detail and adjustments take a little more time

Would I wait an hour for homemade pasta over five minutes for pot noodles? Yup you betcha.

Okay, so I really did enjoy this story. I would say the focus on so many characters can be a bit much, I do love Abeline and I like Braiden's character but I think it gets a bit much when u put all their sections and other characters like Riven/May/Trent into one chapter. I think you were trying to cover all perspectives but sometimes switching so many POVs at once can make the reader lose focus on the main characters and plot

Anyway, other than that nice work :) I look forward to Abeline's story.. I hope she rips Roy's balls off

Stupid May, stupid Trent :[

:) so you are planning on writing about Abeline. It made me laugh seeing that authors note, the irony. Well I look forward to it..

On with the story

Hiya, so far I really love Abeline. So much so that I kind of wish the whole story was based on her alone :D

Now on with the story

As draggy as I feel your story is getting, I still cannot help but wish that you actually didn't branch off with Ranger and Abeline.

I want to know more about Abeline and Ranger than Trent and May now. I kinda hate it that May is such a damsel-in-distress.

The last part was over-dramatic. By that, i mean that Smith over-reacted. Abeline & Trent are treating Mabel like some glass statue. I have got a few questions. Who is Barbara to Riven & Trent? Who is Riven to Trent? Who is Anthony to Trent?

I'm not sure how I really feel about the story. I can agree it was good,and even well writen but I just think you have too much going on in one story. Now there is a cliffhanger about 4 or 5 other people. But other than that it was good.