Reviews for The Runaway Train
Crimson Tiger chapter 1 . 2/16/2013
Really good so far can't wait to see the rest,if your planing on making one
person chapter 1 . 2/4/2013
Make the guy cute. Plzzzzz. I would of runaway sooner but oh well.
A chapter 1 . 2/4/2013
This seems like a good story, but it also seems a little unbelievable. Would six-year-olds know anything about running away? Also, "twenty minutes of abuse later" sounds a little impersonal. Otherwise, I would love to see an update soon!
Love2Write14 chapter 1 . 2/4/2013
Love it! Please update soon! -Love2Write14
Funshine Tonks chapter 1 . 2/4/2013
Please update soon!
HighOnBrokenWings chapter 1 . 2/4/2013
Hey :)
So this was a really good start, good plot and terribly sad. There were a few mistakes, the biggest being tense. You switch between past and present tense almost constantly, and this makes your story disjointed. Another thing I would recommend working on is the use of brackets to convey things that should be inferred by the reader, such as the passing of time. Work on trying to show the readers what's happening and what leads to what rather than stating it. If you need help working on this don't hesitate to send me a message :)
clash0ftheligers chapter 1 . 2/4/2013
i like this, but there are some punctuation errors.
bombshellbecky chapter 1 . 2/4/2013
jeash, what a messed up 'master'. I'm happy they got away, hope this boys cute ;) i wonder whhy she didn't run away sooner though...