|Reviews for Endless|
| Lauren chapter 1 . 2/27/2013
So few reviews! What a travesty!
So, I like the first half of this one okay, and the very end of the second half. Some of the sentences are just so awkward and forced though, that it makes it hard to read. Most notably, the part in the first half where you appear to begin talking to yourself (" Do I set it up first as to avoid mistakes? Just. . . Do it? I'm going to fuck it up, aren't I? Shut up.")
Have a good one!
| thehopefulone chapter 1 . 2/16/2013
You are so much better on paper, more articulate, than you are in real life.
| taraahlx chapter 1 . 2/8/2013
This is really nice! I love how you give us insight into this character's mind- it's like you have created a window into his inner workings. It's short, but it makes you think. I honestly wish you could make it longer, but somehow I think that leaving it short and sweet is what makes it so very good.
| ilovewaffles1999 chapter 1 . 2/7/2013
It sounds really good so far. You should make it longer, add a plot, etc. I think it could be really interesting. You have really specific details and a well-thought writing style.