|Reviews for Goddess Ascending|
| KayteaMathematics chapter 1 . 9/17/2014
So far I think that this is a great story. I can't wait for more.
I'm not the best with spelling and grammar so, I won't be much help there.
But I do have this to say:
1. I know that I don't know much about mythology. And even though alot of people who would choose to read this will, if you draw upon something in mythology that is important to understand for the story, explain a bit about it. (I don't know if you were already planning to or not since this is just the prologue, but its just a friendly suggestion)
2. I like how you gave credit to the owners of things you used in your story. I would just suggest making the numbers appear different. Like using ()'s or something so they don't blend in with the rest of the story.
That's about all. Overall this seems like a great story. Thanks for sharing it with us.
| Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 1 . 2/17/2013
Hmmm... it certainly sounds interesting so far. I can't wait to read more of this! I'm glad there's someone else here who at least checks over their work before posting it.
Keep up the awesome work! :) (:
| dflbookworks chapter 1 . 2/17/2013
This is a really cool story. The characters are quickly defined and reader can easily envision them. Please consider adding a bit more to show the internal struggle that Hades and Persephone have with giving up their daughter. I know that it would take more than a prophecy to convince me to give up one of my daughters. You have an opportunity here to draw your readers in deeply.
Also, I am still confused by the early exchange between the Gods. It might help if you set the scene there so the reader knows what is happening before they all start talking.