|Reviews for Things That Go Bump In the Night|
| Max Sorrell chapter 8 . 5/12/2015
I'm not sure how I missed this chapter until now. FictionPress says it was published almost a year ago... o.o
As a slow reader, I really feel for the class. T.T
Also I DESPISE teachers that will give you a C on an English assignment but not give any feedback other than "check your grammar". Actually I JUST had a teacher EXACTLY like that! But doing Sudoku in class doesn't sound half bad! At least it's not a pop quiz! lol
I love the rumors and Lezlie's thoughts on death. I also enjoyed the irony of her wondering whether Asha believes in ghosts.
| Max Sorrell chapter 7 . 6/29/2014
Amazing chapter! I loved so much about it I'm really not sure what to comment on. A lot of the things I loved were like subtle details that make the story more real like when you described the statue, I believe it was a gargoyle's wings and how it was only good for intimidation. I also liked how one of the teachers is ms. Crocker lol. It's neat to get so many different perspectives in this chapter. I really like Hunter!
| MysteriousFire chapter 8 . 6/13/2014
Candy and Nat are cute together, they seem really good friends.
Aw, I'm a slow reader and I hate it when the entire class has to read the same thing. Everyone always finishes before me!
Oh look! Someone else who knows there's a difference between good looks and appeal!
I have a feeling that the student teacher is based on a real life experience? ;)
But 54 watermelons and fit them in a car, perfect description of math! XD But I share Lezlie's view on math!
Your description of Cleo's appearance is perfect! I never wanna meet her!
Students tell each other ghost stories when the teacher is late?
Sudoku puzzles in math class? Epic math teacher :o
Candace... That's a nice name! I must remember it.
That's quite a cliffhanger to end with! I'm curious now about Mrs. Q! :o
There are a lot of writers on my favourite list, but you're on of those who really deserve their place there, and who I would favourite over and over again if I could
| MysteriousFire chapter 7 . 5/13/2014
Wait is this the pov of a gargoyle? That's brilliant! And he's named Clawdius, epic pun!
Glowing red eyes? I thought the spirit was kind...
Clarissa, so the ghost has a name now.
I must compliment you on the gargoyle scene! You built up the tension just fine and I simply saw it playing out in front of my eyes! :D
Cursing with stones? I should start doing that too!
I wonder who came in the shop...
I eat ice cubes! :D
Ooh new character! I like Hunter already. He's not too shy but still suffers society.
Why do teachers always think they do you a favour by letting you choose your group?
I hate it myself when people start shipping my characters, but I can't help but like Asha and Hunter being together :')
Asha is not a vampire! She only talks to ghosts, but that's perfectly normal!
The teacher behaves like a love doctor or something xD
I feel a little bit sorry for Hunter in the end, but I'm very curious to see how this group project turns out!
Loved this chapter :D
| carlalegre chapter 2 . 12/28/2013
When Lezlie spoke… her language seemed to stiff. You said that they're in high school. I've never met a single teenager that was so formal with the way they spoke. So, either she was raised in a very formal setting and taught her manners early on or, otherwise, it's not very believable.
"Lezlie [coward] in fear…" Should read, "Lezlie cowered in fear…"
I like the way you write. There's no mistaking that you have skill :)
Your characters are believable, and therefore, relatable, which in turn, makes them likeable to your audience. I even like Cleo -Britt, whatever-. She's crazy and it's awesome. Though it does make me wonder how and why she got so much power over everyone. Is it just because she's crazy and, as Lezlie stated, easier to deal with than when she doesn't get her way? Is Cleo one of those girls that you'd rather have as a friend than an enemy?
Anyways, great job with this chapter. I read the prologue, just to kind of get a back story, and it was very enticing :)
| MysteriousFire chapter 6 . 12/22/2013
The whale sounds coming from their stomachs... brilliant xD
Oh are we in Lez's pov suddenly?
I feel sorry for her not being able to sit at a table with people she doesn't know :(
There's something odd about this principal... is it a ghost? :D
Accessive staring sends you to the principal's office?
Cleo get your hands of Lez! They're cousins?
Go Lez! Stand up for yourself! Cleo shouldn't have hit her for that though. Idiot!
I love Asha getting up to help Lezlie without even caring what the teacher thinks!
The last scene left me with a lot of questions though... Someone else suffering from nightmares?
| Max Sorrell chapter 6 . 12/20/2013
I enjoyed the change in perspective. It was interesting to see how the other characters are connected. At first Cleo's attitude toward Lez reminded me of me and my cousin because she's always trying to get me to do stuff for her, but as the situation escalated-... *shivers* She doesn't remind me of my cousin anymore. You're right as a person I hate Cleo but as a character of yours she's regretfully one of my favorites. She's fairly delusional and manipulative and her last line "No one refuses Cleopatra." gave me chills. Simply evil! Yet with so much potential for development later on (Or not lol). I'm curious what your plans are for her. :P
| Alessiel chapter 5 . 8/22/2013
I really, really enjoyed reading this :) I love the story line so far...I really can't wait for you to add more and see what all you have planned for this :D
I love Asha, especially her name! It's unique and I just appreciate it xD Her personality is great...she speaks her mind and she's very strong willed, but also playful...at least she is with Nat. She sure loves to tease her! lol I love it. And oh goodness Nat in the morning before her coffee...that whole scene was hilarious! It was pretty great xDD
This Cleo girl...my goodness. Someone needs to knock her down a few pegs p lol She's so mean D: I feel bad for Lezlie...I hope she wises up ditches Cleo and the rest of the Clinque crew xD She seems so sweet!
I really like G.S.! He's seems like such a nice ghost...it's kind of sad that he can't remember his past...but everything happens for a reason right? It seems he is the only real friend Asha has and vice versa...so maybe it's really a blessing in disguise ] At least for now.
I wonder what this evil spirit woman wants (or at least I assume she's an evil spirit since she has to convince the Gargoyle to allow her to pass) D: And what is the package she has to deliver? Hmm... I guess I'll just have to continue reading to find out ;D Can't wait for the next update ]]
| Guest chapter 5 . 8/15/2013
Best story ever! Asha is amazing! Please continue! I'm a big fan!
| Max Sorrell chapter 5 . 8/4/2013
Another exciting chapter my friend! :D
I liked the line about the dream catcher and how even the dream catchers couldn't keep all Asha's nightmares away. :P
Love the comic relief :D
And how Asha took all the chocolate milk. Yet another trait Asha and I share. XD
Also, I said this before, but I'll say it again, did you really just name a character Mrs. Sweets? XD
I love the name, but Mrs. Sweets had to be a character that gives out sweets XD
Hmm... The ending has me really curious. I'm not sure who you're describing in it or what exactly is going on, but I'm guessing you did it on purpose. I'm sure it'll be explained in the next chapter. :D
| MysteriousFire chapter 5 . 8/3/2013
Is it normal that I held my breath while reading her nightmare? I have lots of dream catchers in my room but I don't know if they actually keep the bad dreams away... I just find them pretty
"Holy buckets of water" I'm gonna curse like that from now on!
Sliding down banisters? I've always wanted to do that!
I just realised you changed POV between Asha and Nat and I didn't even notice! How did that happen?
Why am I suspicious of Nat's need-coffee-in-the-morning state? Gosh I really really don't trust her xD But now I'm not sure if she can help it...
I agree with Asha's view of hot and cold xD
Coffee with honey? I've never heard of that... Must try it once...
I trust Asha's guts! Something's going to happen!
Sketching dreams? Interesting idea...
The ghost delivering packages is intriguing me... I'm wondering if she's Asha's mother, seeing as she had the gift too... Why is she afraid of the gargoyle if it only keeps away evil spirits? Is the person sending her the stones evil after all?
| Unxious Custard chapter 2 . 7/31/2013
(...residence of said town.) I think this should be The residents of said town... (The most well-known rumor of the town spoke of the clouds being held over the town was caused by the use of Black Magic.) This needs rephrasing as The most well-known rumor in town was that Black Magic was causing the clouds. Rumours can't speak, only the people uttering the rumours can speak. There is some really good dialogue takes place in the school setting, and your characters are full of fun. Good job. I hope you will review my story, Psychics v Terrorists too, as a return for this review. It is a modern fantasy, set in England. Plenty of horror too.
| Unxious Custard chapter 1 . 7/31/2013
Hi, a nice spooky beginning. I have a litle trouble with this phrase (Whenever I close my eyes…death is played in my mind.) The verb choice is wrong for the tense. It might read better as whenever I close my eyes, death plays in my mind or whenever I close my eyes, death creates games of my thoughts. I like this story and will read more.
| SupaSaiyanGamer chapter 4 . 7/19/2013
Well, I didn't think she actually knew the ghost. I kinda thought it would come as a surprise. The last thing G. S. said really stuck to me. Hm...
| SupaSaiyanGamer chapter 3 . 7/19/2013
Oh god that cliffhanger! Getting into ghosts now? I'm really wondering now. Nice ending