|Reviews for Lockets And Memoirs|
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 9 . 12/11/2013
*Reads Author notes and author comments*
Stop dancing over there and answer me that question with an update!
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 8 . 12/11/2013
Forgot to mention on the previous review, but grats on your 50th birth- I mean review *w*b
Elias going Mercutio there in the opening scene lololololol. What a joker xD
And magic infodump imminent in 3...2...1
Fanservice scene with UFOs imminent in 3...2...1
I'm calling it. Letitia is in love with Lynn.
That last scene. Was the scene that cannot be written so overwhelming that Letitia fainted? /shotrocketedkickedtothemoon
I'll concur with the rest of the reviewers that your writing has leveled up, especially with regards to your description. Keep at it *w*b
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 7 . 12/11/2013
We are talking the other day about how long you have gone missing ;_;
So, here I am to hummple you back with some reviews ;)
Your heart must be fluttering with rabu when you wrote this chapter, because all I could see was dreamy and tender gestures from the stranger (I'm a secret to all, but you... so borrowing that when I woo a girl), a rare dere sight from Luka... basically the whole atmosphere itself.
Nice to see that Chronomacy is mentioned here, since it's concept of time travel sorta ties in with the premise of love long forgotten (exemplified by that painting in the previous few chappies I think)
Moving on *w*
| xxxyx chapter 9 . 10/1/2013
Hyde? Jekyll and Hyde? *shot*
Yay, dragon! Seriously, that was unexpected. I wonder why the twig's so special. Is it from a sacred tree or something? Or is it just the staff but disguised as a twig?
Hm. Maybe you could do with some description of the Demon General.
Ugh, Luka, didn't you know that 'Did I get him?' were very famous last words?
Anyway, overall, the scenes sequence were presented... a little bit haphazardly, sometimes it made me think a minute or two on when this scene actually happened, or how it relates to the main story-flow. I got the rough idea of what is happening, but I couldn't grasp the entire sequence, if you get what I mean.
1. 'The fire flared up with each sentence uttered, changing slowly but surely [into] a blood crimson hue.'
| Revamp chapter 9 . 10/1/2013
This chapter started off dismal in tone but intriguing as well. Peculiar that there are no children in the town besides Letita. I wonder what happened to them all. I have a feeling that I will learn about the supposed rituals that have been going on.
Even though they captured Hyde, it was revealed that Letita was the one behind everything in a great plot twist. I'd like to know more about Letita and her bond with her Lord. How did they come to be? Why do they have a bond and is Letita even a human? Why did all of the villagers die? Was it from Letita? What is the backstory to all of this? I have many questions regarding this chapter that I hope get answered with future updates. This was a nice chapter, and as to whether or not Luka got him...Well that is up to you, now isn't it? xP
| cud-b-better chapter 9 . 9/30/2013
Sweet an update, today has been a good day. Some more mysteries appearing regarding lynn's identity and the voice's. Leaving the chapter on a cliffhanger nicely done as for the question in the author comments the answer is obviously 'no' this encounter reeks of a prelude to something much bigger after all (at least for me).
Anyway my usual amateur corrections which may or may not be correct.
She wasn't fond running, - I think you need an 'of' between 'fond' and 'running'
her hands moved on her own then - I think you need to change the second 'her' to 'there'
Hidden a safe distance away on the roof a building - another 'of' between 'roof' and 'a'.
As usual good work, I hope to read more soon. 'till your next chapter, keep it up.
| xXxd chapter 4 . 9/27/2013
Considering the pace at which you are advancing this story, I say it's a great timing to reveal some background information and past in this chapter. Good job on the plot so far.
Had a good laugh at Elias's sudden change in character. Loved how he teased Luka.
Amber Saye, she must be the person/scientist behind the maintenance of the Spring Country's barrier. Just taking a wild guess.
| xXxd chapter 3 . 9/27/2013
The rate at which you are introducing new mysteries is exceedingly fast o.o... not that I don't mind it. :D
I like Lynn's character, as her curious nature is really what advances the story so far. So keep it up on developing her character!
The timing at which the stranger chose to break in Elias' house... I bet he had been following Lynn ever since he disappeared in the end of the last chapter.
On another note, you really have got the knack for cliffhangers/endings. Advancing to the next chapter!
| xXxd chapter 2 . 9/27/2013
And we are into the fantasy part of the story now!
Mm, the Spring Country. So I suppose we have three more countries that have the three other seasons as the supporting theme?
Quite a few new terms introduced in this chapter. The most prominent two were probably "angel" and "demons". I am guessing this story revolves around those two terms.
The stranger that appeared at the last part... I am definitely keeping an eye out for him XD.
| xXxd chapter 1 . 9/27/2013
...I admit, what pulls me into reading this story is your synopsis/summary. It is really eye-catching, so great job on wording it. :)
Like others had mentioned, I love the premise of this story. Very novel and intriguing.
Don't have much comments about the prose. (I think you are a better writer than I am.) Let's see what direction you decided to take this story to.
| Jax Creation chapter 1 . 9/14/2013
Oooh, amnesiac girls, mysterious lockets that blast people through space. I'm quite liking the premise already. The summary gives me great vibes of coming romansu(tilde)
It's a bit short, so I can't say much on the plot. But your writing is lovely to read.
There are a few odd phrasing issues:
(e.g. "I'll definitely get you next time, Lynn-nee-chan!" she said angrily before getting down the ladder."
—[getting] should really be [going] or [descending]; getting implies the retrieving or obtaining something, going and descending are verbs of movement.)
Also try to keep an eye out for long, run-on sentences (first paragraph, second sentence, for instance.)
Anyway, hopefully I'll be able to comment a little more on the characters and plot with a bit more reading. (-w-)b
| Revamp chapter 8 . 9/4/2013
This chapter is longer than your others. I like the added length and the explanation of the types of magic within your world. I also really liked Letitia's character. I hope she's alright.
The way Elias and Luka pick at each other. The virgin comment was golden. Great job.
| Revamp chapter 7 . 9/4/2013
Another great chapter from you! I can tell that Lynn's feelings towards the two knights are developing and I like the bond she's creating with them. Great job with depth.
| Revamp chapter 6 . 9/4/2013
Lynn is showing drive and passion to save the people of Setermo, and a lot of heart, but I wonder if she'll be able to pull it off so easily.
| Revamp chapter 5 . 9/4/2013
I'm finally back to reading this. Wonderful chapter so far. I like the description of the knights and I wonder what the story is about the dead knight.