Reviews for Arclight
CheeseloverTwentyFive chapter 26 . 2/18
This is super intense! I love it! The description is great, and the thought-process us very realistic. I mean, I think it is, not that I have been in her situation before...

I like your general style of writing though. Nice work! (as always)

-ChzLvr25
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Shay Zana chapter 46 . 8/19/2013
[trailing wisps up toward the clouds before they were blow away] - Blown.

Interesting turn of the plot. Still want to know what an Eluvian is, lol.
I'm wondering when Ev will regain consciousness and the perspective will switch back to hers. I'm growing a little bored of Tess', but that may just be because I prefer omniscient style.
Again, love the disorientation, but it does cause me to read slower to really grasp the situation.
So I'm really curious about this guy. I'm thinking maybe he's a merc, just trying to do his job but got caught up in the mess of whatever those shadow things are, and found himself stuck with two girls. His conscience got the better of him at the end, though, which I like. That is, if my take on this is correct.
Guest chapter 71 . 8/5/2013
Story found! Thank Oghma!
Reading this feels like reading pure action/emotion rather than reading a description of action/emotion. For me this is truly immersive literature.
Shay Zana chapter 41 . 8/5/2013
This new character is interesting, and I'm wondering what exactly an Eluvian is, if its a nation or a race or a religion.
It's very fast paced, there always seems to be something going on, which is exciting when I'm in the mood for that. Sometimes I just feel like reading something relaxing, but this is horror genre after all, lol.
Nothing much really negative to say as of yet, that's why I don't review every chapter, partly also because they are so short.
Shay Zana chapter 34 . 8/1/2013
I do love your use of vocabulary and the colourful descriptive language, and I'm pretty sure I always mention that every time I leave a review, lol. But since I know you prefer to focus on the negative aspects and things that can be improved, here goes.
I still don't know what it is, but sometimes I find myself having to re-read sections to comprehend what was just explained. Maybe it's just me, though. I feel like it can get a bit muddy at times.
I like the change of environment, but one thing I thought I should point out was your use of the word 'sun.' A lot of sci-fi writers do it, skipping the true word of star to the name that was given to our own star. I get that it's slang and just habit, but the true proper word should be star, or the name given to the star. It's no biggy, it's just something that always bothers me when I see it XD
Anyway, I am making my way through this :) I'm just one of those readers that likes to take in every word and detail, so naturally I'm slow...
CheeseloverTwentyFive chapter 24 . 7/15/2013
Okay so now that Nolan is dead (I think) we go to Evelyn's point of view...
I like seeing things from her point of view. Her reaction to all she had just been through.
Her, describing what she was doing, what she was seeing and how she felt about it.

Good work!
-ChzLvr25
CheeseloverTwentyFive chapter 23 . 7/15/2013
I am like crying - almost...
Evelyn, watching all that must be horrible...
How gruesome, and watching her father be hurt like that...

Really...really...exceptional writing...
Its amazing!
-CHZLVR25
CheeseloverTwentyFive chapter 22 . 7/15/2013
...
I am lost for words
...

Its all so cruel, how they'd take the poor girl from her dad by force..
And that's not even it!
Being able to know what's happened in Nolan's mind is almost like BEING him...
Its exceptional...
-CHZLVR25
CheeseloverTwentyFive chapter 21 . 7/15/2013
I just feel sad...
I start to think about what I would do if I were the girl, or Nolan...
And then it leads me to think about all the people in the world who are sad...
Which, in a way, is completely irrelevant, but it is true...
How horrified, I'd be if I were that girl...
If you can get that emotion out of a reader, than that means you ARE a great author...
I read books-legit novels-without a change of face, but this makes the reader feel...
And that means it is REALLY good (as I have said many times...)
-CHZLVR25
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CheeseloverTwentyFive chapter 20 . 7/15/2013
Poor Nolan... He's got so much on his mind...

Anyways: the chapter was more informational than eventful - but good :)

VERY NICE CLIFFHANGER!

I like cliffhangers that just are short and sweet. Well not exactly sweet but not the super-long ones.
This one was nice, straight forward, and suspenseful.

-ChzLvr25
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CheeseloverTwentyFive chapter 19 . 7/15/2013
Hmm, short chapter, but still quite nice.
The characters are interesting! Definitely original!
Nice descriptions as always...

-CHZLVR25
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CheeseloverTwentyFive chapter 18 . 7/15/2013
Okay, this is really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, AWESOME!

This is going on my favorites and you are definitely a favorite author now!

It amazes me, how someone could write something so awesome!
(trust me-my stories are not that good)

Suspense! Thrill! AWESOMENESS!

I really am enjoying this!
-CHZLVR25
CheeseloverTwentyFive chapter 17 . 7/15/2013
John Mercer:

Really nice chapter!

The story in whole is progressing nicely, but I am a little confused...
I'll probably have to read it a couple times, but your style is very admirable and your descriptions are just wow.
There's lots of suspense and mystery, which makes one want to keep reading! (and I will!)

Will review more :)
-CHZLVR25
Shay Zana chapter 31 . 7/9/2013
The last few chapters I've read, where it changes perspectives from Ev, were quite disorientating, to be honest. Knowing your style, maybe you were intending that, but it also makes keeping up with the story difficult.
First of all, I really don't have a clear idea of who's perspective we are now following, you never really made that clear. I'm guessing it is Ev's friend from earlier chapters, but that was a while ago, and details about her back then were sketchy too, making it hard to identify and connect.
The re-run over the events we have just read while following Ev's perspective also felt a little unnecessary. I felt like I was just re-reading everything that I already knew, and the only new thing I learned was that they had been followed by this person who's name escapes me. One of the chapter names was Theresa, but I don't remember her name being that... I'm just a little too left in the dark, I think.
I do like how the voice of the perspective has changed style now that it's no longer Ev's. It feels younger, more upbeat, but still, I can't match this new perspective with who we are actually following.
Sorry for giving such a negative review. Just being as honest as possible.
Apocalyptos chapter 69 . 7/7/2013
The ultimate chapter.
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