Reviews for Bad, Bad Girl with the Homesick Blues
TheGlycoprotein chapter 1 . 3/13/2013
The imagery here was absolutely gorgeous - I also loved the way you integrated a cliche into it as well "the house was the kettle calling the bedroom black" - I thought that added a wee bit of extra depth to this piece :) I didn't really like the formatting, mainly because I felt like it disrupted the flow a little, but in certain places it did seem to add effect. Perhaps if it had been set out in a few longer paragraphs, it might have flowed a little better, but that's just my opinion. I liked how the last two stanzas were rhyming, it was a pretty effective conclusion to the piece. It also added a somewhat childish feel, and seeing as in my head the girl and boy in this are kid-like, I felt that also added a certain something. On the whole, I really enjoyed this piece and the atmosphere and mental picture it created. Keep writing, you did a brilliant job :)