|Reviews for Handmaiden|
| Gremlin-Rayne chapter 1 . 3/14/2013
I love it! I haven't read you other story, so this will be something new!
Keep writing, I wanna know what happens next!
| Fading-Scream chapter 1 . 3/14/2013
A brilliant opening to a potentially fabulous story. A few typos and grammatical issues but nothing too drastic. Maybe just read through it and find where it doesn't flow so nicely. Other than that i have no critiques (which is sort of a miracle).
I like how you have structured the intro and your characters are multidimensional. I could perfectly envision Artemis and Lane and could see the strength of their relationship through your writing.
You mentioned that your usual chapters are about 5000 words in length. You may want to question that as your story is rather deep and requires focus - in other words it isn't popcorn fiction. I know that I personally struggle to maintain my focus for a long period of time although it all depends on what audience you are aiming for.
I look forward to seeing what this story brings. Best of luck.
| Miggles chapter 1 . 3/14/2013
Really good opening - very interesting. I spotted a few typos, such as 'her hair as dark as the its scales' and 'she smiled wildly'.
And I liked your little comment on the end about 'opinion' and 'criticism' - I hate when people just say, oh I spotted a typo, or I didn't understand something without saying why! D:
But yeah - really, really good and looking forwards to reading Chapter Two. :)
| Cynthia Brent chapter 1 . 3/14/2013
Great opening, especially how gentle and sympathetic Artemis is and how much detail you put into the world of the dragons. Looking forward to more soon!