OK so I don't have any criticism whatsoever because it was great. My favorite line was "You tell me I can fly and then laugh when I try." Really loved this line! Can I put this in my profile? Please? I'll say it's from your poem.

And also loved this as well
"I won't stay in the sick slimy slums of life.

No matter the pain, no matter the strife.

I will always push and I will always strive."

i have no words... it is great