YAY!
I am sorry, I just get so spastically happy when people mention me in their stories.
YAY!ok I'm done now.

So yeah, Haven't been checking this lately but
YAY!
TROW IS BACK!
I love Trow - she's a great female character.

But Kamin is still the coolest name ever!

The story sounds great, its getting more into the plot of your old version now,
that's good...

I really love this piece and I am sorry that you have writers block, but you know a simple walk to clear the head can help...

-
ChzLvr25
{critique/fan}

That is chilling, how she doesn't even care. She just killed someone. And she doesn't care.

Whoo, the adventure begins for real! Wendy's cool. Hope she comes back in later chapters.
Love it as always, looking forward to the next chapter!

Yay! Cheeselover25 is happy!
{Now talking like one of those over-exagerating fashion designers}
Darling, I LOVE it! Its just SCREAMS amazing! Beautiful! Perfection!
{Now talking normal}
I like how the dialouge is very relatable, whenever Kamin is stumbling over words and stuff... Very creative.
And the descriptions are great, too.
Looking forward to more
(and I'll scream a storylover12345 untill she R/Rs this too)
One question though: What color is Kamin's hair?
I don't know if you mentioned it in the previous story, or if I overlooked it in this one but I'd like to know so that I can imagine him while reading.
Sorry-sounds stupid, but I don't want to assume his hair is some color to find out its not.
Besides that,
loved the story
you will see me suggesting it to people on my profile...This is my favorite sci-fi on fictionpress so...
Regards,

CHZLVR25
{Critique}

I am really loving this new version!
More backstory, detail and suspense...
Plus now you know (from the other one) that he has a mission agaist them.
Lovely, really, and I'm so glad you decided to do this.
Great Job, and keep it up!
Also, if I hadn't said this fifty times while reviewing the previous version:
KAMIN AUSTAS IS THE COOLEST NAME EVER!

CHZLVR25
{Critique}

I have not read the original story, but I really like the idea and the plot. I notice that you've been updating very quickly? I like that :D. Also, I notice that you have very little grammatical or punctuation errors. It makes reading very smooth and I respect that. Keep up the great work!

O.O Wowz. So epic... This is a really good rewrite of an already-good story!

Wow! that was a great story I loved the futuristic setting and I really felt sad when Lionel died. It's sad that he died due to his brothers playing. I'm very interested in this story please keep writing this.
BTW if you could help out a fellow writer could you read my story and tell me what you think? It's a bit long so don't feel obligated or anything but if you're interested here's the link: s/3108837/1/The-Last-Man-On-Earth

Wow. Fantastic. I was completely drawn into this story by the end of this prologue. I felt the people you wrote here and actually felt my chest drop a bit when I realized Wendy was looking at Lionel's profile. I'm very interested to see where this story is going and I sincerely hope you're planning to continue this.

The only flaws I noticed were minor, just a couple of grammatical bits that aren't terribly important and could be disputed, but at the paragraph "By the time eight o' clock rolled around..." the very end of the paragraph seems to not have a conclusion. It looks like the sentence got cut off somehow.

Other than that, keep it up. :)

Yay, I can't wait for the rest of the story. I can see the differences between the prologue of the new one, great improvements!

Wow, this is a really interesting idea, well written, too. I read the original version and I liked it a lot! I'm looking forward to reading more of this rewritten.