|Reviews for Eumelia|
| neuron chapter 1 . 7/16/2013
This was a sweet but sad story. Its written in a somewhat stately and distant style, but that seems befitting of the subject matter. It feels like a real ancient Greek myth, even if its only inspired by one.
A few typos:
gods-give - god-given
afterbirth laid discarded - afterbirth lay discarded
Usage (this will seem a bit odd, but it did jump out at me):
"sucking greedily on one of her tits". Not sure if its just a British English thing, but 'tits' to me is a slang/swear-word with massive sexual connotations, which really jarred with the feel of this story. It would never be used to describe breast-feeding. I would use nipple.