|Reviews for Ghost|
| CrystalMind chapter 1 . 4/7/2013
Before I get into the actual poem critique, let me make a few quick spelling reminders. (#) is line number.
(5) past - passed
(10) barried - buried
Those out of the way, on the one hand this is very raw, and I do like that. The transition from "someone" to "I" especially in the last three lines is dramatic. I like it, as it gives an impression of moving on from wishing for help from someone else to trying to rescue oneself, but it's hard to say if it's part of this poem.
On the other hand, "it's all I have x2" feels out of place. Even something so simple as a change in punctuation between the two might make a difference.
This isn't bad, just a little rough around the edges.