Reviews for Fevered
Huntsmaster chapter 1 . 4/10/2013
That was a typo and I am very sorry. Thank you very much and I did change that.
999999999999999999999999999999 chapter 1 . 4/10/2013
There is an interesting dichotomy here between the emotions expressed. On the one hand, there is a bitterness and pain, yet on the other there is someone desperately clinging to love to pull them through the darkness. The poem is well written, and what's more, the words flow nicely, something that takes talent and time to achieve. I would only add "thoughts, dreams, etc." or some other such word to the end of the second to last line, as fevered is an adjective and cannot in good convention close the statement, although if you wish to make the active artistic choice to use fevered as something else, you are within your bounds to do so. I just wasn't sure if it was a typo or an oversight. Brilliant work.
Cheers,
Riyin Nos Reche