Reviews for The Mystery of the Haunted Mansion
GingeRael chapter 1 . 4/22/2013
Its pretty good but you need to go into more depth. I didn't understand all the characters and it'd be nice to know hwo they knew each other. Why were they searching for a mystery? Things like that would be good.
Meggssuper13 chapter 1 . 4/18/2013
I enjoyed this. But you need to describe the setting better, and pace it slower. Maybe mention more of the relationship between the friends? Or where they were? Or how they meet each other? Their appearances? You need to add a bit more depth. I've always loved paranormal/mysteries like this. It shows very much potential, though.