|Reviews for Transcend: Despair (Season Two)|
| Aquade chapter 11 . 3/3
Uh oh. Looks like Lucy is being suspected...did someone see her? I hope Lukas finds Naomi soon!
| Rogue Melody Angel chapter 11 . 1/8
Excelent chapter! Can't wait to read more! Lucy seems to be in actuality a very nice person, evil, yet good_ Lukas had to disobey Seth's advice of staying away from the people on Lucifer! At least he hasn't had problems summoning his solblade!
| Chiisutofupuru chapter 11 . 1/2
Tons and tons going on now... almost too much. Lukas! Just hurry and save the girl before they do something really stupid.
(Can I predict that Lukas is going to be injected with Lucifer? That, to me, would be a really exiting moment... just sends shivers down my spine when I think about it. Especially if he does it willingly to become stronger on purpose! Just imagine his power! and how much rage he would have...)
| Oci Oceana chapter 11 . 12/30/2013
Oh my, to much suspense! XP Can't wait!
| SanjiandSerea chapter 11 . 12/29/2013
A chapter update woo-hoo!
Ahhh Lucy like I said one of my favorite characters in Transcend. I sense a Heel-Face-Turn coming. ;) Or... Nah I'll keep my speculations to myself.
Those drug-dealers were rather laughable. ._.
Naomi, she'll prolly be ok.
And Lucifer... hoo boy the plot thickens
Awesome work Bene-kun and happy New Years!
Ja Ne for now SanjiandSerea!
| The lone canine chapter 11 . 12/29/2013
Ahhh! So Lucy is starting to have some other feelings about what they are working towards perhaps? Or is it some sort of subtle doubt that she herself isn't picking up on... either way this was a very interesting chapter and it was well worth the wait :)
Looking forwards to the next one as well!
| The lone canine chapter 10 . 12/15/2013
Well, it took some time but I finally made it to the most recent chapter of season two. Man things are tense already, and it's episode 34! It's a really great story, and I'm definitely excited for the next episode to see what happens next.
As to the question of AshlyxLukas...
NUUUU! I did kinda want Nyla to tag along with Lukas' journey though, I really liked her. Betting we'll see more of her later on.
And go Nathan! Even though an episode or two ago he got the crap beat out of him xD
Can't wait for more!
| AlpacaOverlord chapter 10 . 12/12/2013
Nathan passed! And learned a new trick. And a new character happened. And then flashbacks...
i wondered when Lukas would find out about the thing at the end. I thought it had happened earlier but I guess the time progression in my head was wrong. Time to overthink while waiting for the next chapter.
| Tanaka Suaderi chapter 10 . 12/9/2013
What did I just read, Nathan getting the absolute crap beaten out of him! What, How, No.
I don't... Know what to say other than "Vat Tha Hall" and why is Seth such a wimp. I thought he would be like a god damn kung fu ninga karate master.
Your Loyal Reader, Connor
| Oci Oceana chapter 10 . 12/5/2013
I can't wait to see what happens next!
| Lexyntel144 chapter 10 . 12/5/2013
Ahh, the plot thickens...this is good! I like the way the story is progressing on bith Lukas and Nathan's sides. Eagerly waiting for the update!
| Chiisutofupuru chapter 10 . 12/4/2013
Naomi! NOO! I was looking forward to reading about her again when Lukas decided to go back! You are a mean author you know that! Grrr...
| Rogue Melody Angel chapter 10 . 12/4/2013
Serenes said "not her baby again" did this happen once before? An intriging chapter! Lukas really needs to start noticing how the girls swoon over him...!
| Argentum Vir chapter 3 . 12/4/2013
["He then grabbed the..."]
[On his way to the guest bathroom he grabbed his towel and other toiletries.]
Might have to revise the paragraph before a bit to help fit it in.
["...the girl argued."]["he ordered."]
These are still dialogue tags and not action, so they should still be preceded by a comma. I see it happening multiple times in this chapter. Another thing is how the dialogue tags are written. When you use quietly, and ordered, etc, it typically is to lure a reader to interpret it a certain way. Try to distinguish the volume by tone. That will get rid of unnecessary tags, and make your prose read cleaner.
If you need to use an ellipsis to make a trailing voice, put the dialogue tag first. That way, you can have the dialogue properly formatted without sacrificing the punctuation.
Now, plot wise, the story has taken a different turn. He's predictable in that he's running from his problems. He's predictable in that he's shut inside. What I wasn't able to predict was how determined he is, even in deep depression.
I will say that the people he meets are interesting. I think what keeps the story so lively is you're characters. To me, Lukas is kind of bland and the cut standard main character. He has a lot of depth though, so I don't mean that in a bad way. He also reacts in a way that seems perfectly orchestrated at times. You kinda did it away with this new season where he's unsure and drawn inwardly. Which felt like a good change of pace.
Speaking of further chapters, you're foreshadowing is pretty obvious. I guess that's how it is with your style though. The reader gets to see and hear pretty much everything. Try keeping things a little more cryptic, and throw in some red herrings.
| prettynpink4578 chapter 10 . 12/4/2013
More AshleyxLucas! Nyla is good where she is for now, I don't think she needs to tag along can't wait for the next episode :)