|Reviews for Happy Together|
| InspiredAndNatural chapter 1 . 5/22/2013
Nice. You do need to put in capitalizations where needed, like "Moms" and "Dads" unless it's something else like "Mom's" and "Dad's," that is, if it's not plural. You also need to put in commas and periods where needed. If it's a quote, the period and/or comma should be before the ending quote like this:
These are just examples:
Period: Lillian looked at John, hesitating before replying. "I'm speechless." Should not be like: "I'm speechless".
Comma: "Hey John, what's up," Lillian asked. (Should not be: "Hey John, what's up", Lillian asked.)
| HenryDavid chapter 1 . 4/23/2013
I like it. Descriptions are good, and the sense of romantic feelings from his perspective is evident.
That's what's good in the Friend Zone stories.
Well done. One of your better pieces.