Reviews for This Little Life of Mine
Crow's Claw chapter 1 . 4/27/2013
Overall this is a solid beginning. The conversations between characters flow well and the variation present helps to keep an air of liveliness.

If you don't mind, I'd just like to give a few suggestions. Mainly, try to develop characters through actions and reactions rather than through exposition. Instead of telling us that Bryn is quiet, show us through her interactions with other characters. Maybe show her arms stiffly by her sides while talking with unfamiliar people or to groups. Perhaps make Fallon talk to others sitting in the Conference Room before the meeting commences ( and likewise have Bryn not talk or reply with short sentences). Using exposition tends to interrupt the flow of the story and bore the reader. Perhaps I'm just being picky.

Still, you've set up the characters and the social divide between the classes well and I'm interested to know what happens next.