Reviews for Safe Haven
leofrost chapter 3 . 5/5/2014
Action going pretty quick. No MAry Sues pls! and also, Elora passed out pretty quick. BTW, how did they all come to island? and watch your characters mouths, don't forget their are 10yr olds in this group. Thxs!
leofrost chapter 2 . 5/5/2014
Nice chapter again. So, these kids were all bullying one of their members? Not a good start for a team. Also, who is the girl on the cover? Plus, you said that the group was ranging from ten to eighteen. Was that just a guess of the character? Or did u make a mistake? because, according to your first page, the oldest should be 16. Also, how did a light stop im from continuing bullying the girl? Maybe you should have tried a quick tackle or punch. And finally, most ppl don't give first and last names, only first. Thxs!
leofrost chapter 1 . 5/5/2014
Nice beginning, i am already hooked! Try not to give to much of the book away, and also, The kids hair color is very vivid, so it might be a problem if they ever have to got in hiding. BTW, u said their families were caught in a strange blast of power in 2099, which, according to the story, was 14 years ago. Therefor, Lukius would have been born already, and not be affected. Also, you said the powers have been passed from generation to generation. The closeness of the explosion would mean that these kids would be the first generation, since most were either born in that year, or were born soon after. Try putting it at 2012 or older. Thxs!
Anonymouse chapter 1 . 5/17/2013
Global warming doesn't exist. I think you mean the periods when Earth warms and cools. It's been warming and cooling ever since it was born. Global warming still doesn't exist. :/
HashTag9 chapter 1 . 5/14/2013
Nice. Continue!
Celiaguest chapter 1 . 5/4/2013
Please post the first chapter it sounds like you have a really good story started!