|Reviews for Better Half, Best Life|
| Social Anxiety Lives chapter 1 . 4/30/2013
Finally, a poem with some stanzas! I think it is also more of a challenge to write and break the poem up. So, kudos to you my friend! "Beauty, song and wine" take out the comma. I think if you are going to follow the theme of no punctuation then you really need to stick with it. "Implore" some great word choice. Make sure you read your poem out loud. At times it feels awkward. My favorite line by far is "About my raging burning inner guilt". You say conquer or something similar twice near the end. Try a different word selection. Perhaps with the second one? That one comes off as a bit cliché.