|Reviews for The Blind leading the Blind|
| Social Anxiety Lives chapter 1 . 4/30/2013
All lines beginning with capitals necessary? And is the punctuation needed? Don't be afraid to remove it. Not all poetry has to be grammatically correct. I feel an extra line after a period should be there. It'll give a more stanzaic feel. Try some line enjambment. I find I am constantly stopping and starting when I am reading. Very heavy material here. I am left wanting some stronger images. I really want to feel and see what the poem is trying to say.