|Reviews for I am the Elements|
| Social Anxiety Lives chapter 1 . 4/30/2013
I just feel the lines are too long. I think you could enjamb these and make a nice smooth flowing poem. Perhaps have the "I am" refrain as a heading for each stanza? I love the line "suicidal leaps from the clouds". Very earthy imagery it really makes me feel the poem. I think the "I am tears" needs more. It doesn't fit with the rest.