|Reviews for Elemental Rogues|
| LorrahBear chapter 7 . 11/7/2016
This seems like a solidly interesting idea for a story, and I'm curious as to where you're going with it.
A few points for critique:
-Your narrator is throwing me for a loop, because most of the time, you have your typical 1st person narration...and then suddenly, they've broken the 4th wall and begin addressing me directly. If that's what you're going for, then so be it, but own that style instead of dropping into it when convenient for historical plot information.
-You do a lot of telling in this chapter. Telling me about his emotions instead of showing them. Telling me about his personality instead of letting it shine through his actions.
This is a solid start, and I look forward to seeing where you go with it. Good luck!
| MINUS THE BEARS chapter 1 . 6/30/2013
WE NEED MORE OF THIS.
-MINUS THE BEARS