I continue to enjoy this story. Every chapter is an about-face, taking the story in a totally different direction than ever imagined. I have given up trying to predict who or what will show up in the latest edition! Don't you dare let me down when all the strings come together and the true root of the story is revealed!

I really enjoy your writing style. There is an ease and a familiarity to it that makes the story flow and keeps one's interest piqued. There are some humorous aspects, love the inner voices of the characters that reveal their true feelings and thoughts - oftentimes clashing with what ultimately spews from their mouths. I don't know. There's a lot going on, every little bit of information that seems out of the ordinary, a clue. Hell, even some of this review doesn't make a whole lot of sense! Just know that I am an intrigued reader and will be with you to the bitter end.

Hey, how 'bout I "complain" about a "short" chapter just to spice things up? The previous one with Strife and Mouseshit (hysterical, by the way) was like the worst kind of tease. Seriously. What the hell was that? I hate you. Well, no, not really.(!) The whole ring thing, a bond, searching for the missing half... All the stuff I am a sucker for... And left hanging. Yeah, I think I hate you. (No, not really!)

Love it. Keep up the good work and look forward to being tortu... I mean, reading more. Thanks for sharing, and, oh, thanks for the reply!

Regards,
sglily

Hehe. The name "Strife" suits him.
But seriously, I always feel like I'm missing something when I start a new chapter. There are so many missing things with this chapter. You have a lot of characters so I don't even remember who Strife is.

Okay, I'll bite...

I LOVE this story! It's confusing as hell sometimes(!), but, that is just part of the overall charm, not to mention, mystery of your work-in-progress. Sometimes, one just needs to have a little patience when it comes to a story such as you are weaving here... Throwing down your hand too soon and revealing what exactly is really going on would be NOT to your benefit - or your readers. So, in saying that, I enjoy the kind of random (but very deliberate) twists and turns your tale is taking thus far. Each chapter is totally unexpected and heads off in a direction that adds further intrigue to not only the storyline, but the path your characters are taking as well.

I enjoy the quirky behavior of Frost's character, although, it seems as if he has some hidden demons in his past. I really wasn't sure I was going to like the chapter with "Daniel", but was duly impressed midway through and couldn't wait to read the next line to find out what you had in store for for "him" and us, your readers.

This latest chapter, again, unexpected in so many ways - offering up new (and crazy!?) characters. More mysteries surrounding yet another pair of (star-crossed?) lovers drawn to each other for reasons not completely known yet.

Love the pace, love the interaction between characters of significance - as well as those playing a lesser role. I for one favor your nice, long chapters! I never understood people complaining that a chapter is too long! Seriously? I would take the greedy route and demand more!

Keep up the great work! Keep surprising me/us! Look forward to the next installment. Thanks for sharing!

Regards,
sglily

Once again, you have left me confused.
You have a lot of characters, and many of the stories don't seem to link. I'm very interested in Xander and... Strife. I wonder why you've named him that.
I still don't like what you're doing with the (brackets). Particularly that huge flashback thingy. That's when it makes the least sense. Are Xander and Strife meant to be soul mates? And what IS Strife? He doesn't seem human.
Anyway, as usual, update soon please! I hope the next part of this chapter is with the same characters. The change between characters is quite jarring. I hope you have some sort of ingenious way of weaving all of these storylines together or something. At the moment, it feels like 3 or 4 different stories. But I'm sure you'll think of something.

Is Daniel that Frost character?
I was following everything quite well up until that weird hallucination. I'm fine with a strange, supernatural hallucination. I just don't like the way you described it. It made no sense. It starts off in 2nd person, which just doesn't seem natural. If this is the therapist hallucination, can you make it clearer please? I don't like how you put some things in brackets. You did this in the earlier chapters too and I don't see the need. After that, I kind of just got lost.
This entire chapter is disjointed from your main story, once again, just like the previous chapter. It's not in chronological order, and it's confusing.
Update soon though because I want to know what will happen next. I just want a better flow, you know? Sorry if this sounds too negative.

I am... Very confused.

Damn it! No kiss? Oh you love to torture is. Maybe next time...

Ok. You have me intrigued, so update soon please! I like Tallen and Frost.
I thought you were going to continue straight from part I. Frost looked like he was going to be attacked.