Reviews for The Love They Fought For |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This whole story, for its entirety, was just wow! I'm speechless. Just when I though things couldn't get any better, they did! I felt as if this story was more hard hitting and emotional then the first. I loved the portrayal of Ismee and Ramon in this story. You really can feel their pain. I felt, with the establishment of the first story, connecting was much stronger and so when they felt anger, I felt anger; when they felt anguish, I felt it too. It's not often I find stories that bring a lump to my throat or make my heart hurt, this one certainly did. So thank you for sharing this story! I do hope you come out with another instalment to this story. xx |
![]() ![]() ![]() Totally wish I had time to read this right now! Darn finals...I'll read and review after next week. Glad to see you're posting again! Hopefully I will as well sometime soon... Lots of love:) Ney |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it! So happy they're finally together again:) The one thing I would try to improve upon is word choice. I noticed a lot of words being used again and again in a paragraph, so it would be nice and make it much more interesting to read if you switched it up a bit:) I would copy and paste to show you what I mean, but we now cannot copy, so I'll just point out a particular paragraph. The first paragraph uses the word 'money' a lot. 'Money', in some cases, could be replaced with 'cash', or 'bills'. Hope this helped a bit:) |
![]() ![]() thank you so much for the update :) i love reading their story, they are truly meant for each other, you describe their emotions perfectly i can really feel their pain, i hope the mother gets what she reaps, she makes me so angry! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for the update really touching chapter it was intense and i loved it |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you so much for updating my favorit story i hope the mother rot in hell |
![]() ![]() ![]() You might want to make it a bit clearer as to why her mother is doing this. What mess did Ismae leave behind that has her so angry and hell bent on revenge? I'm pretty sure this is the first time we've met her (excluding last chapter), so it's hard to imagine someone doing that to anyone, so make sure her character, and the things she does, revolve a lot around this to make it seem real. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh noooo i would kill that so called mother right now the good thing is that at least he s not going to jail |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey now, this is new. You cannot leave me like this. You have to update. Soon, preferably. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved this chapter. I don't remember it from before. It gives great depth and detail, giving readers an insight to Ismae's mind. Fantastic, in my opinion. On Fictionpress, I've only seen this two other times, by the same author, and now you. Really awesome. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Earthquake was new, so glad I'm rereading:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hope u update soon i cant wait |
![]() ![]() ![]() God, I love this because together, Ramon and Ismae are so sweet and you capture their feelings really well X) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! Happy you're updating this again:) |