Such beautiful visuals. Thank you so much. What a treat.

I like it, it's a little disturbing but really well written.

Unsettling in all the right ways. Agree with the other reviewers that you could have saved a little on the gore, but apart from that.

This was fantastic! I'm not big on a lot of adjectives when critiquing writing, but this short story deserves one. I think you could have introduced the idea of why her relationship with Ted is - or was - the way it was, and I also think you may have overstated the way his crushed ribs looked beneath the truck, but the grit of this story is fantastic. I particularly enjoyed the line about being a good daughter, letting the wind blow through her hair, wrapping her arms around herself - I think that was a great addition to the story, and was well juxtaposed against the fact that she has just murdered her father. I think it would add to the story if you delved a little deeper into the abuse - sexual? domestic? - because it may make readers relate more with the narrator. You spent a good hunk of time talking about Ted's good side - but what made him so dark? What was his fetish? Did he rape his daughter? Beat her? Burn cigarettes into her skin? What made him such a two faced character? Was her mother always such a "sparrow like" woman? Was she also abused? What kind of truck is it? Is it a rusted old truck, or does Ted spend a good portion of his time keeping it up? I would encourage you to dive into your characters (which you may have already done!) outside of the story, so you better hear their heartbeats, understand their motives, and know who they are, in and out. Seriously, though, this is a great story! I think I may read it again, and even again! :)

I have mixed feelings about this. It's really well done, but there are a few spots that I'm not too sure about.

I don't really like how you only talk about how Tad was, and not really about his relationship with his daughter. I mean, it could just be me, but I don't feel like the subject of how he treated her was really broached, and this could be far more interesting if you did talk about it.

I do love the style of this, though-the dialect in the narrative is really well done, and how you keep introducing new elements of Tad's personality, and the things the daughter envisions are all really interesting.

There's one other thing that I don't like. I feel like this is more disgusting than it had to be. Your mentions of the blood and all were a little sicknening, and I think you could make just as big of an impact without all of that.

I really love this, and'll be voting for it. Good luck in the WCC!

This is good. Seriously. Wow. I have no words. I love how Tad was a man who was loved by everyone, except his own daughter. I would be interested to see what happens to Daughter after the cops come. Good job.

Well, this was disturbing. In a good way.