Reviews for Because We Believe in Fairytales |
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![]() ![]() I've now read all but one of your works (saving last one for tomorrow). And my reaction to this one is similar to all the others: i wish there was more, more to the stories and more stories period. Your writing very successfully captures my attention and interest as your characters are so believeable. I imagine by now your thesis is fully behind you and you are progressing in either a PhD or work. I hope you are able to find time and your muse to continue writing, including the two unfinished pieces! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really loved it. You portrayed intense emotions in minimal words and that is what I found absolutely breathtaking. I love how you chose to write in Jake's point of view. It felt more realistic and it brought out the feeling of sadness quite well. Thank you for the great read! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like this due to the sad but realistic plot. There is a lot of narrative rather than dialogue, but that does not make the story boring. I know you wanted to focus on the idea of moving on, but I feel it would have been interesting to see their friendship through Lavvy's eyes. I liked the writing too. It was fairly descriptive but not too much, but it was simple and easy to read, I don't think more poetic writing is needed here. I think the one word ending is not needed, as you have already driven home the idea that he will move on eventually, so there's no need for repetition. Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() I really liked your writing style here. I think you really nailed this one for the topic - nice. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wished I could have seen more of an explanation regarding why Lavvy wanted to break up but maybe that would have slowed the flow of the story. Ha, just noticed I used that word she used as her weak reason to break up. But since you decided to focus on moving on it is quite good in that sense. I loved the last few lines as I could see it easily. Keep writing, read two or three of your other stories. Pretty good. |