YOU NEED TO UPDATE THIS MAN HOLY GOODNESS OH MY LORD COULD YOU JUST
THERE ARE ONLY TWO FICS I'M FOLLOWING AT THE MOMENT AND THIS IS ONE OF THEM AND YOU ARE JUST KILLING ME RIGHT NOW
ESPECIALLY WITH SOME ROMANCE COMING UP
ARE YOU KIDDING ME
YOU JUST PUT THAT OUT THERE AND THEN DISAPPEAR FOREVER
I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEEEEEEEXXXXXXXTTTTTTTT
SO PLEASE CONTINUE
PLEASE?
I'D APPRECIATE IT GREATLY

Wow! I love this story! The train bit reminded me of Harry Potter so much xD Update soon!

I think the story has potential, the first sentence really drew my attention in because I can relate. I hate alarm clocks and hate waking up early as most people do. When the person is talking to himself when she gets up I think you should italicize every thing he's saying to himself, also the alarm. Also is he black? " I just hate the color people associate us with." That made me think maybe shes not white. I don't get the last sentence, or the stanza above it. It could just be me but I think you should re-word it. Theres other small suggestions I have but i'm too lazy to type them all haha