Reviews for Faded in Pleasure
Guest chapter 6 . 6/17/2016
OMG! This is so intense, levi is such an alpha, I just want him to admit his true feelings. Update in your free time! because what you're writing is epic.
may chapter 6 . 3/2/2015
are going to continue with this story ? it's really good
The Phoenix Girl chapter 6 . 2/23/2014
I really really this story... I really like Sophia's character but Levi is an asshole :s he can be so mean and hurtful! I hope he changes or he'll love Sophia to Grant because even if she loves him she won't be able to take his abuse any longer
Hope you get to update soon!
xXUnBreakableSoulXX chapter 6 . 6/28/2013
Oh my gosh . You know I always love your stories.! This is amazing. :)

I love the story behind it I know it's going to be a great one. As always. Tbh though Levi kinda scares me. I dont know he's hot but the way he treats Sophia just gives me the chills.
I really hope Grant is a nice guy . I imagine him as a hot cowboy ;). Hahah

I think you could use more detail on what's going on around them. If that makes sense. Like the settings and stuff. Honestly, I'm sorry if my reviews are crap and I'm annoying ._. . You're really such an amazing author I can't get on your level. You're so flawless. I aspire to be as great as you one day in writing, tbh. :)
THISISAWESOME chapter 6 . 6/22/2013
for some reason, i love Grant and Sophia! I imagine grant as Taylor Lautner and Levi as Sterling Knight! I guess you know how I imagine Sophia right? xD please update!
You are mean! you make stories that always leaves us begging for more :DD Again. update please
John DelMar chapter 6 . 6/24/2013
Dear 1,

Hey stranger, long time no see. Nice to see that you're still writing; not just that, but actually moving away from fanfiction. It's good to see authors evolve and expand into different things. Though I can see signs and remnants of SWAC fanfiction lacing this piece. It's an interesting story, that's for sure. Though there are a few things that could use some work.

Firstly, there's quite a few grammatical errors. Misspelled words or words that seem as if they were meant to be something else, but were changed by spell-check. Something that could easily be solved by either giving it a thorough look over after writing or by getting a beta-reader to read it before posting it.

Secondly, the pacing seems to be very, very quick. Some of the scenes seem like they could be fleshed out much more. I know that sometimes the drive that you feel to convey the entire story can be very strong and cause you to rush it, remember though that in writing you have to paint the trees in order to see the forest. Details are the key.

Setting is also very important and it can help immensely in conveying the emotion and tone within a scene, especially since you're using the first person perspective. What would normally be an average looking hotel room would instead be a room abundant with annoyances and bothers, such as a squeaky door, a creaking fan, or a painting that just won't stay level, to an angry Levi. This helps show the emotions of the characters in a subtle way by demonstrating how anger and joy can distort our perspectives.

I think this piece has quite a bit of potential, especially given your past successes. I just think you should take more time on each scene to properly flesh it out.

I'm looking forward to future updates and to seeing you further develop as a writer.

Ciao for now. Bona Fortuna.

Sincerely, Joe

P.S. I know I've said it before, and I'm sure I'll say it many more times in the future, you're an amazing author. Thank you for sharing your writing with the world. Also I apologize if my sentence structure and grammar is a bit messy, I've been faltering with my english.
Guest chapter 6 . 6/18/2013
YES! Grant and Levi haha I love you for this, like seriously! Levi gonna go crazy and I'm so happy she said no to him :)
darkgurl92 chapter 6 . 6/17/2013
yay..Grant moving to CA means more drama and getting to see Levi's jealously..can't wait update soon :)
Fujiwara Yume chapter 6 . 6/17/2013
0o0...I. Love. This. Story. Keep it up your an awesome writer, I can't wait for more stories from you.
darkgurl92 chapter 5 . 6/16/2013
Great start u should really continue this story.. Update soon. :))
kiciga chapter 5 . 6/13/2013
honestly I think it was great,just not used to reading non sonny whit a channce fics but I liked it,would love to read more chapters..
Guest chapter 1 . 6/13/2013
love it! pls update
kiesha chapter 1 . 6/12/2013
i am a fan on on ur swac so it was obvious that i was going read this story and i say that u did a gd job always and i can't wait too see how much this envloves : ) pleaseee update soon :)
lizzabet chapter 5 . 6/14/2013
I really hope she can say No soon and really push him away! I also hope she starts dating Travis bc I wanna see how pissed Levi gets.
I did find some errors in the text, but otherwise I like the story:)
Guest chapter 4 . 6/12/2013
awwww so cute! Levi actually cares. I keep rereading this over and over because I love it so much :3 please update soon!
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