Reviews for Now See Here! |
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![]() ![]() Your first story! Im in love and so the sladin arc begins...MWAHAHAHA! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Peter. What the heck man HAHA. That last line just killed me. This is definitely a great start! I enjoyed the dynamic. Your English is pretty good too, so don't worry about it. |
![]() ![]() Read the whole thing and I enjoyed it a lot 3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() Came back for a re-read. :) Love your story |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really enjoyed this story. Your characters were super fun to be around and I loved reading them getting together. I also enjoyed all your side characters as well, I feel it painted a better picture of their lives. If I had to make a criticism I think I would have liked to see the couple alone more. For most of the story they were around other people as well. Great stuff! |
![]() ![]() I like the story, but there's too much conversation. Most conversations scrolling down is something being said by someone else so the writing style is predominantly speech. There isn't much happening in terms of the plot and instead the rate of the plot moves with the conversation. In this case, because the rate of the plot depends on the progression of the story, the pacing of your story ends up being very slow. Per chapter there isn't much actually happening aside from conversation. I am not sure yet if this is a writing style that I enjoy, but I like the characters you have created. |
![]() ![]() I've read this before, but I had to come back to it. I'm so looking forward to reading it again. ML |
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![]() ![]() Loved the story! Great job. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved the chapter. Great story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. I just realized I have failed to comment on this story, so I'll do that now. I just finished reading through this story for the 3rd time. Literally, it's that good. Especially for someone whose first language isn't English. I applaud you on such a well written story. Much Love. |
![]() ![]() ![]() AHHHH I love Lance so much. He is hilarious and awesome. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Back for a re-read and enjoying it all over again. |
![]() ![]() Hermosa historia,muy digna de tu ingenio! La he disfrutado,gracias por compartir su talento. ...sera posible saber como les irá a Mark y Jake en su relación luego de haber transcurrido el tiempo? |
![]() ![]() I'm so glad I found this - enjoyed it and now I'll keep reading. :) |