THIS IS SO GOOD OMF

This combines the story line with pure emotion which is written through the lines. It makes me feel as if I am there with Emma and with Carter, watching everything happen as it happens to them. :)

It is very well written and I think that though the plot may be slightly unrealistic in parts, it is a fantastic story idea with lots of unexpected twists in the plot along the way. My only point is that you may want to proof read things as there are one or two minor grammer mistakes (this is constructive critism, I hope :) )

I look forward to the next chapter being posted :)

this just gets better as the story progresses :)

I'm really enjoying this and wanting to know what will happen as the story continues to develop :)
I apologise for not reviewing sooner but I have just got back from a trip to South Africa yesterday and now am catching up on things that I have missed :)

I'm mind of confused as to who this person is that Emma is with. But that's just me, not you.

At some points your book is unrealistic, but for the most part it's accurate.

Carter, Carter, Carter. Stop it, you're hurting yourself. But I guess it wouldn't be a story without problems, would it ;)

I actaully enjoyed reading this! I could relate to this story in probably more ways than I should. You have a simple talent, my friend. Your writing is almost like a conversation, and that's actual a form of writing.

I really like this. There are some things you could improve on.

Before you upload your chapters, or anything that your wrote, you should wait an hour or thirty minutes and maybe read something else. Just enough to where your mind can take a break from whatever you just wrote.
Why?
Because if you proof-read over something you just wrote right after you wrote it, it's harder to find mistakes because your brain knows what you meant, even if you made a slight mistake in typing it.

I think you're doing a great job though. Keep it up!

The plot of your story is interesting although in some parts I found it unrealistic. I'm looking forward to your explanation on why such situations happened (especially with what happened with Carter and Logan). Even so, I like your story and I'm looking forward for your next chapters. :)

It's about time she gets angry with her mother. Seriously. It makes sense too, since she's changing a bit and frustrated with losing weight. I wonder why Logan isn't talking to her... I don't like him much.

I really, really hope that I don't sound like a bitch, but I kind of agree with some of the stuff "Guest" said. I'm really sorry, and believe me, I know that reviews like that hurt, but s(he) had some good points. Not all of it was true, but anyway.

I love how this story is coming along! It's progressing nicely, and it'll be interesting to see how everything ties together :)
Update soon!

Oh, Poor Emma!

I like this story a lot. I feel like it's a real character, because people really do struggle with weight problems and eating disorders all around us.

It was really good, sure I"ll give a shout out. :)

This is really good. You've approached a big issue very well. One thing to watch out for it the formatting: try and break up the big paragraphs a bit, so it's easier to read. Other than that, keep up the good work (:

The concept for your story is good and the idea is inspiring, but I honestly believe it's missing a bit of realistic quality. Like, the situations are believable but you go about them in a way that's unbelievable. For instance, the brewing relationship with Logan: how often does it happen that a really hot guy suddenly takes notice of a girl at yoga, randomly tells her she's beautiful when no conversation was offered beforehand, and then chases her down after the class to give her his number? You didn't even give him a chance to like her personality or anything. And all that could be excusable if you didn't have the shy girl with self esteem issues kissing the hottie who she believes to be out of her league! Like, seriously? This sounds like a preteen's diary entry. I was honestly hoping (and wishing) that she was imagining that because there was no build-up at all. It was just... Anticlimactic.

Actually, I think everything in this story is anticlimactic. You're writing like you're afraid of drama and sadness. Every time something seems like it could build up to become an okay plot, you make it fall flat or you rush through it so quickly that the reader isn't even given time to have an emotional reaction to it.

I'm not writing this to tear you down. I want you to be better and improve and I'm not about to pat your ego by telling you this story is amazing and the best thing I've ever read.

Also, all the stuttering isn't necessary. Before you write dialogue, think it over in your head and ask yourself if it sounds human.
Cuz your stuttering isn't human. Have you bothered reading over your own sentences? N-N-No O-O-One S-S-Stutters like this. It's just an unnecessary inconvenience to your readers. This is human stuttering:

"Ove-ove-ove-over the, the river and th-through the, through the, through the, the woods, t-to G-grandmother's house we g-g-go."

The interesting thing about a stutter is that you don't just take every word and stumble over it. It varies. You can stumble over every word that starts in a consonant, or every other word with a consonant, or just plain words. Like, like, like...like th-th-this, for example.

Looked it up for you and everything.

Wellllll... I had a feeling that was coming.

Gosh, losing weight like that is totally frustrating! I mean, it's amazing that she lost one pound, but I know how annoying it is when you've done all that work for just that result. Nice job making it realistic, by the way. Too bad Carter doesn't know that a pound a week is actually very good.

Emma. Well, crap. I hate her parents quite a lot. Also, don't be afraid to swear in your stories! If it makes it more realistic, do it! I think coke addicts would definitely not have as clean a mouth as her parents do

This is so good! Im actually jealous lol. You said my story was good but yours is amazing definitely shouting you out and following your story from now on i feel like im hooked and your story inspires me and I want to make my story just as good as yours! Thanks for your review on mines also :)