Reviews for PTB Smut University 2013 |
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![]() ![]() OMG, Daph! That was fantastic. I loved it! *bravo* awesome job. Monica. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, hello Madam 50 Cent/Boyz II Men lol. First, I loved seeing myself and my husband in Nicole and Sean ... in their love, commitment toward each other, but also in their ethnicity. "My favorite lines: She worked hard to keep in shape after squeezing out his four jug-head kids." and "I didn't have a choice. There's no real life for me without you in it." Wonderful. I'm actually going down the list on the share doc and yours is the third fic I read and the second I chose to review :) |
![]() ![]() Awesome job! Loved what you were able to accomplish in so few words. I feel like I know their whole lives, and the lemon was hot! Kitch |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved this! Typically my favorite stories are about couples struggling to come together, but I really enjoyed this one about how intense and erotic a strong, loving couple can be. As far as where it fell in the Perve Swerve spectrum...I feel like it was pretty strongly in the Naughty by Nature department, except for a couple of word choices. For instance, "her dripping slit" sorta took it to a different category. I'm not sure I would have even noticed had I not come to read this with the lesson in mind. Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed the level of description - it felt natural and appropriate - not forced or uncomfortable. On a side note, I found it a tiny but distracting to switch between his and her point of views, but it was a minor distraction and would not stop me from reading more about this couple. And last, LOVE that they are an older, established couple. Really, really loved that aspect, as well as how completely devoted to one another they come across. Thank you for sharing! |
![]() ![]() Hey there fellow SmutUni Student! Wow! This was really great work! You did a wonderful job in portraying the characters and the relationship between them. The lemon was hot and written to perfection! I can't wait to read more from you! Thank you again for a great read! Keep up the GREAT work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sweet :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the characters. An established older couple with kids finding a little time to appreciate each other. I especially loved the husband's POV. Funny ending - almost getting caught with his pants down :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey there fellow student! I tried leaving you a review earlier, but it didn't go through for some reason. I really enjoyed this! I loved that it was an original story. I really liked how you described/ created your characters and the interaction between the two of them. The stair scene was perfect and the ending fantastic! LOVE LOVE! Can't wait for more! Talk to you soon at our "lessons". |
![]() ![]() Stolen moments are the best-kids out of the house is such a treasure! I really liked these two. I thought you created a very realistic relationship. I chuckled out loud at the sports bra-"I'll come back to that, he thought." Thank you for writing DW |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome job, Daphodill! Loved everything about this! I think you are a solid Naughty by Nature with how very real the scene was - so relatable and equally hot - great chemistry. There is something sexy about subtlety and comfort - this couple was clearly comfortable together which upped the ante in my opinion. I think you also have some very strong Boyz II Men in you though. You did something really different and very cool. There were some overt words of declaration when he thanked her for staying with him which was crazy heartwarming to me- but you also showed their reverence in their actions, their tenderness and regard towards each other. Hot and sweet! I want to be this couple with my husband in 10 or 20 years from now. Great job bringing these original characters to life and showing us that it only gets better with time :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awww, that was so sweet. I loved the connection that you showed through them. Very well done! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very well done, Written almost lyrically and very descriptive. You set the scene very well, explaining who they were to each other and how they knew each other. Very good. And pretty darn hot. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was lovely Daph! |