I like it, I would totally try to give you an in-depth review but alas, I know nothing of poetry. But I like the reality of this, the concept of the night and day relationship between two people.

it seems they were falling apart and nobody cared about doing something to keep together

i absolutely loved the flow. i like to think that there's a story behind why you chose 2:39 out of so many numbers. i like the way you question about how someone so big can be so small. before that, you wrote about there being too much space. i think that's because the room is short of one person and it makes you feel unsafe, makes you feel small and therefore you don't feel secure enough to sleep. or that the person in the room doesn't feel like they're completely there. just a thought.

making eye contact with the wall. i thought that was just a little bit odd because to make eye contact, you'd require two actual living things. the wall doesn't have eyes. but it's still all right. 'we sleep wounded' is a beautiful line and i think you can do without the 'up' in the sentence. as in: [we sleep wounded and wake afraid]. it flows better that way.

i see that the poem is focusing mostly about the space between the two of you. i think that space doesn't actually refer to physical space, it refers to the space inside your heart. it might not be a love problem, it might just be life causing you two to have problems and not talk about it, but you still love each other but you still can't sleep because there are things you want to say but can't. that is the space.

so, great work. i really enjoyed reading your poem.